Gathering Examples Test

Structure (The Name is Mine)

-framed her story -beginning her sentences are simple ex: "This is a story about a name. The name is mine." conveys confidence in her decision -sentences become complex and uses a larger vobab ex: "My answer was long, philosophical, and rambling- that is to say, unsatisfactory." -trying to make people understand her decision

Speaker (The Name is Mine)

Anna Quindlen - attended Barnard College (probably liberal and for women's rights) -mother, wife, and journalist

Tone (The Name is Mine)

Assertive ex: "It was a political decision, a simple statement that I was somebody and not an adjunct of anybody, especially a husband." "Damned if I was going to be hidden beneath the umbrella of his identity." Contemplative ex: "What's in a name?" "... he just wanted to make sure I was one of them. And I am- and then again, I am not." "Now, there are two me's, the me who is the individual and the me who is part of a family of four, a family of four in which, in a small way, I am left out."

Speaker (Cut)

Bob Greene -columnist and essayist -writes interest stories -writes for Esquire (aimed at men)

Speaker (Westbury Court)

Edwidge Danticat -emigrated from Haiti to NYC -Barnard College, Brown University -3 brothers

Purpose (The Name is Mine)

Exploring ex: In paragraph 6 when she asks, "What's in a name?" alluding to Romeo and Juliet, as well as exploring what a name really means. She says, "...I wanted to communicate to him that mine meant something special to me..." She wants people to understand her decision. Sharing ex: She is sharing her experience with others, for people who might be considering changing their names. Uses her own story as an example. Also acknowledges that are some consequences, by saying, "But nowadays I think the only simple decisions are whether to have grilled cheese or tuna for lunch."

Tone (Cut)

Informal word choice is simple: "I walked into the gymnasium; there was a piece of paper TACKED to the bulletin board" sentence structure is simple: see structure card very conversational, used I: "I remember it as if I were still standing there in the gym."

Audience (The Name is Mine)

NY Times readers, especially women in their 30s, women who are married or considering changing their name

Structure (Cut)

Several anecdote. Uses a lot of informal simplistic sentences ex: "I remember the last time I cried." "I had not known the cut was coming that day. I stood and stared at the list."

Purpose (Westbury Court)

Showing how experience can shape your life. The fire took away her innocence "I had been so wrapped up in the made-up drama of a world where..." "Every day on my way back from school, I hurried pas the flowers and candles piled in front of the spit where the Nigerian, whose name I don't know had been murdered. Still I never thought I was living in a violent place." alludes to Wizard of Oz

Structure (Westbury Court)

Simple sentences "I was watching television one afternoon when the fire began." Then become complex- proving her loss of innocence "The apartment across the hall stayed empty for a long time, and whenever I walked past it, a piece of its inner skeleton would squeak, and occasionally burnt wood...."

Purpose (Cut)

To prove men that are cut from teams in their adolescence, become super achievers later in life. ex: "I know that my ambition has been enormous ever since then..." Bob Greene says about his own experience getting cut. "It seems obvious to me now that being cut was what started me in determining that my success would always be based on my own abilities, and not someone else's perceptions." Bob Grahm Also sharing his own experience

Audience (Westbury Court)

immigrants, those who have experienced something traumatic that took away their innocence???

Tone (Westbury Court)

nostalgic - "Every once in a while, though, the place came up in conversation, linked to either a joyous or painful memory." guilty -"When my mother asked how come I, the oldest one, hadn't heard the children scream or hadn't smelled the smoke coming from across the hall, I confessed that I had been watching General Hospital and was too consumed in the intricate plot."

Audience (Cut)

those who read the esquire, esp. men who have been cut from the team