Ch. 4 Pt. 1

Time is money in any business environment. To be successful in the business world, you must be able to create concise and easy-to-read messages. As you revise, eliminate flabby expressions, long lead-ins, fillers, redundancies, and empty words. Your audience will appreciate your brevity. Which of the following sentences contain flabby expressions? Check all that apply. - I worked on the Mark Master campaign for 35 hours. - If Marie calls, please tell her we will proceed normally. - As a general rule, you should contact Jorge; he can afford you the opportunity to access the beta version. - In all probability, Alessia will receive a promotion this year. - Jason is aware of the problem and will take care of it.

- As a general rule, you should contact Jorge; he can afford you the opportunity to access the beta version. - In all probability, Alessia will receive a promotion this year.

At this point in time, we are not sure if we are postponing the meeting. a. We are not sure if we are postponing the meeting. b. As to whether or not we will meet at a later date, it is up in the air.

a

I am sending you this letter to let you know that the team is ready for its next assignment. a. The team is ready for its next assignment. b. This is to inform you that the team is ready for its next assignment. c. I am writing this letter because I need to let you know that the team is ready for its next assignment.

a

There are many ways one can help a user when answering the phone. a. You can assist callers in many ways. b. At this point in time, one can help a user in many ways. c. At this point in time, the great majority of users can be helped in many different ways.

a

Identify the redundancy in the sentence. "It is absolutely essential this format is followed when responding to the Request for Proposal (RFP) from the client." a. Request for Proposal (RFP) b. Absolutely essentials

b

Read the following paragraph, and choose the best revision for one of its sentences. "Dr. Blake is retiring at the end of the month. There will be an unoccupied office upon his departure, and it is big in size. Because every other office is occupied, we should convert Dr. Blake's office into a lounge. It is absolutely essential that this issue is discussed at the next staff meeting." a. Because every other office is occupied, it's recommended that we should convert Dr. Blake's office into a lounge. b. Because every other office is filled, we should convert Dr. Blake's office into a lounge.

b