Engl 1301- Punctuating Quotation
Class and wealth states Neumann "often determine how someone dies, with what medical care, comfort, and attention" (41).
-CORRECT WAY "Class and wealth," -Neumann,
Burgo claims that neither bullies nor narcissists '"emerge from happy childhoods, secure in their parents' love and imbued with a sense of their own worth". Bullies force their own "fear, shame, and self-doubts' onto those they hurt in an attempt to feel better, according to Burgo. The displacement is how try to make up for their negative pasts.
-CORRECT WAY Burgo claims that neither bullies nor narcissists "emerge from happy childhoods, secure in their parents' love and imbued with a sense of their own worth."
"Among that group of 138 of the nation's wealthiest colleges and universities, four in five charge poor students so much that they'd need to surrender 60 percent or more of their household incomes just to attend, even after financial aid is considered."
-INCORRECT WAY "charge poor students so much that they'd need to surrender 60 percent or more of their household incomes just to attend," insists Zinshteyn, "even after financial aid is considered." -CORRECT WAY "four in five change poor students so much that they'd need to surrender 60 percent or more of their household incomes just to attend, even after financial aid is considered."
-CORRECT WAY As Sam Kean explains in "Fun With DNA, "Because genes strongly influence hair color, eye color, and facial structure, you can get a rough idea of what a person looks like by trawling through his or her DNA." -Sam Kean reports in "Fun With DNA" that "you can get a rough idea of what a person looks like by trawling through his or her DNA."
-INCORRECT WAY Sam Kean reports in "Fun With DNA" that "you can get a rough idea of what a person looks like by trawling through his or her DNA".
In The Omnivore's Dilemma, Micheal Pollan writes "Researchers have found that people (and animals) presented with large portions will eat up to 30 percent more than they would otherwise." This finding illustrates, as Pollan says, that our appetites are "surprisingly elastic," which makes sense given the way we have evolved. In the past, he says, it made sense for "our hunter-gatherer ancestors to feast whenever the opportunity presented itself, allowing them to build up reserves of fat against future famine."
-In The Omnivore's Dilemma, Micheal Pollan writes, 'Researchers have found that people (and animals) presented with large portions will eat up to 30 percent more than they would otherwise." -"our hunter-gather ancestors to feast whenever the opportunity presented itself, allowing them to build up reserves of fat against future famine"
Gawande explains that the debate surrounding euthanasia, "is about what mistakes we fear most-the mistake of prolonging suffering or the mistake of shortening valued life." (244)
-euthanasia (no comma needed) -life" (244).
Cellphones are central to both students' and parents' lives, leading Rich and Taylor to argue that, 'banning cellphones from school is increasingly seen as counterproductive".
-that (no commas needed0 -counterproductive."
Lipman's research suggests there is a link between music training and success. In fact, many high achievers said that "Music opened up the pathways to creative thinking".
-thinking." -music
"Graduates are turning down job offers in high numbers," Judith Warner writes 'essentially opting to move back home with their parents if the work offered doesn't match their self-assessed market value."
writes, (has a comma behind)
Putman claims that "Children who experience toxic stress have trouble concentrating, controlling impulsive, and following directions." (112).
CORRECT WAY -directions" (112). -"children (should not be capital)
"More than eight million Americans," Harries explains, "live with a smoking-related disease."
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In spite of a great deal of evidence suggesting that what happens during recess is "a crucial part of children's cognitive, academic, physical and mental wellness," Lahey argues that schools are taking away recess time as a way to discipline students.
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CORRECT WAY -"Touching, rubbing, picking, and poling the eyes, nose, and mouth," Parham explains, "help pathogens to breach mucosal surfaces, as does breathing polluted air, eating contaminated food, and being around infected people" (8).
WRONG WAY -Clarifying how pathogens get inside the body, Parham writes, "Touching, rubbing, picking, and poking the eyes, nose, and mouth help pathogens to breach mucosal surfaces, as does breathing polluted air, eating contaminated food, and being around infected people." (8) -Parham claims that "Breathing polluted air, eating contaminated food, and being around infected people" allows pathogens to enter the body (8).
Carl Richards argues in "The Odd Relationship Between Money and Happiness" that if we accept that money is related to happiness, then we have to somehow make sense of the fact that the world contains "plenty of people who seem to have very little money and lots of happiness".
happiness."
CORRECT WAY -According to Cooley, it was "the industrial revolution and the increase in mass-produced objects" that made people begin to consider dollhouses and miniatures toys.
ALSO, CORRECT WAY -Cooley argues that it was "the industrial revolution and the increase in mass-produced objects" that allowed dollhouse to become toys.
More and more people try to baredoot each year instead of buying expensive running shoes. People are realizing, as Christopher McDougall points out in "The Barefoot Running Debate," that "that is no evidence that running shoes do anything to prevent injuries". McDougall explains that the newest research suggests "that runners in shoes experience far more impact than runners in bare feet."
"The Barefoot Running Debate," that "that is no evidence that running shoes do anything to prevent injuries."
"Faith and a tightly controlled press insulated the Massachusetts settler; by 1692 the New England witch differed from her English counterpart primarily in that she was more real." -Stacy Schiff, The Witches; Salem, 1692, page 73
QUOTES CORRECTLY -As Schiff argues, "Faith and a tightly controlled press insulated the Massachusetts settler; by 1692 the New England witch differed from her English counterpart primarily in that she was more real" (73). -Schiff claims that "by 1692 the New England witch . . . was more real" to her neighbors than the English witch (73). QUOTES INCORRECTLY -Schiff contends that an insulated Massachusetts culture meant that "by 1692 the New England witch differed from her English counterpart primarily in that she was more real." (73)
Sommers explains that although "boys score as well as or better that girls on most standardized test," boys are still "far less likely to get good grades, take advanced classes or attend college."
"[b]oys score
In "Muscular Body Image Lures Boys into Gym, and Obsessions," Quenque reports that "[p]ediatricians are starting to sound alarm bells about boys who take unhealthy measures to ty to achieve Charles Atlas bodies that only genetics can truly confer." Quenqua continues, explaining that "The price American boys are willing to pay for the perfect body appears to be on the rise."
"the price American
Wortham observes that although Facebook is known for creating closer ties among friends and colleagues, for many people "it can have the opposite effect of making them feel more, not less, alienated".
(CORRCT WAY) -alienated." -"closer ties among friends and colleagues,"
Right now Kolbert writes, "we are deciding, without quite meaning to, which evolutionary pathways will remain open and which will forever be closed. No other creature has managed this, and it will, unfortunately, be our most enduring legacy." (268)
-"Right now," -legacy" (268).
in "The Neurological Pleasures of fast Fashion," Marc Bain illustrates how fast fashion companies make money despite low prices. he writes, "the only way to turn a profit selling clothing that cheap is to sell a lot of it." And these companies are great at selling a lot of clothing.
-"The only way to turn a profit selling clothing that cheap is to sell a lot of it."
-CORRECT WAY Hutson declares, "While height and mental quickness elude many of us, charisma can be taught." -For Hutson, "height and mental quickness" are things a person is either born with or not, while 'charisma can be taught." -"charisma can be taught."
Hutson believes that charisma can be taught.
In The Emperor of All Maladies: A Biography of Cancer, Siddhartha Mukherjee says, "it was in the time of Hippocrates, around 400 BC, that a word of cancer first appeared in the medical literature." This word, acooding to Mukherjee, was "karkinos, from the Greek word for 'crab." Mukherjee goes on to explain that a cancer tumor "reminded Hippocrates of a crab dug in the sand with its legs spread in the circle." (47)
CORRECT WAY -Mukherjee goes on to explain that a cancer tumor "reminded Hippocrates of a crab dug in the sand with its legs spread in a circle" -In The Emperor of All Maladies: A Biography of Cancer, Siddhartha Mukherjee says, " It was in the time of Hippocrates, around 400 BC, that a word for cancer first appeared in the medical literature."
CORRECT WAY- -As Mongeau notes, "Teachers with a bachelor's degree in education can make as much as twice their Head Start salary at the local public school." -Mongeau explains that "[teachers with a bachelor's degree in education can make as much as twice their Head Start salary."
INCORRECT WAY -Teachers with a bachelor's degree in education can make as much as twice their head Start salary at the local public school, Mongeau contends. -Mongeau explains that "teachers with a bachelor's degree in education can make as much as twice their Head Start salary."
CORRECT WAY- According to Baker and Pollan, we have changed "the living and fertile carbon system in our dirt into a toxic atmospheric gas."
INCORRECT WAY- According to Barker and Pollan, "human activity has turned the living and fertile carbon system in our dirt into a toxic atmospheric gas." INCORRECT WAY- According to Barker and Pollan, "Human activity has turned the living and fertile carbon system in our diet into a toxic atmospheric gas".
In "Twitter (Sort of, Sometimes) Expands the 140-Character Limit," Robinson Meyer explains why a tweet is limited to 140 characters. Meyer reports, 'Twitter began as a one-to-many SMS broadcast service, so it imposed technical limits on how long a tweet could be." At the time, according to Meyer, there was a "160-character SMS text limit."
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Luhrmann writes, "The sale of audiobooks has skyrocketed in recent years." At the same time, total sales in the book industry have fallen slightly.
NO ERRORS
The amount of money spent on prom has steadily increased over the years. Carrns says "This year, according to the credit card company Visa, prom spending will reach an average of $1,139 per family, up to 5 percent over last year." Carrns also explains that parents cover much of the cost.
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"By omissions, are US schools teaching their students that character, morality, and ethics aren't important in becoming productive, successful citizens?"
QUOTES CORRECTLY -Barnwell asks, "By omission, are US schools teaching their students that character, morality, and ethics aren't important in becoming productive, successful citizens?" QUOTES INCORRECTLY -Barnwell asks, "by omission, are US schools teaching their students that character, morality, and ethics aren't important in becoming productive, successful citizens?" -Many, like Barnwell, are wondering if students are learning in school that "character, morality, and ethics aren't important" in becoming successful later in life.
