Inquizitive 1: Fused Sentences

Edit the following statement to correct any errors: In 2014, the United States Supreme Court ruled bans on same-sex marriage [unconstitutional, this] decision forced states to issue marriage licenses to same-sex couples who apply.

unconstitutional; this

The medieval strain and the modern strains of the plague known as the Black Death all contained millions of DNA [units however fewer] than a hundred of the newer units were different from the older units.

units. However, fewer

The Hubble Telescope, launched by NASA in 1990, photographs the [universe in doing so the] Hubble Telescope has revolutionized the field of astronomy.

universe. In doing so, the

Although they occurred more than two hundred years apart, the Red Scare of the 1950s and the 1692 Salem witch trials were similar in some [ways each] of these events was the result of fear-driven hysteria.

ways. Each

One form of the Black Death of 1347-51 caused bleeding under the [skin, another form] caused fever.

skin, and another form

The 1997 science fiction film Gattaca looks at the effects of genetic engineering on [society, the film] also raises important questions about the nature of science and humanity.

society. The film

Some people worry about the amount of homework assigned to [students however homework] has been shown to correlate with student success in a number of studies.

students. However, homework

Sleep deprivation can result in poor academic performance by college [studies, also, lack] of sleep can be detrimental to students' health.

students; also, lack

Depression and anxiety are two of the most common health problems affecting college [students, however, eating] disorders are also on the rise.

students; however, eating

Colleges often discard late applications without reading [them prospective] students need to turn in their applications on time.

them; therefore, prospective

The Carolina Panthers were defeated in both of their Super Bowl appearances, once in 2004 and once in [2015 similarly the] Cincinnati Bengals were unable to come away with a win in either of their two Super Bowl appearances.

2015. Similarly, the

Shakespeare's plays have many modern-day parallels many students miss the similarities because of the challenging language.

Correct Version: -Shakespeare's plays have many modern-day parallels; however, many students miss the similarities because of the challenging language. -Shakespeare's plays have many modern-day parallels, but many students miss the similarities because of the challenging language. Incorrect Version: -Shakespeare's plays have many modern-day parallels, nevertheless, many students miss the similarities because of the challenging language. -Shakespeare's plays have many modern-day parallels, many students miss the similarities because of the challenging language.

Knowing how to build a fire is an essential skill for a person in a survival situation, also, staying alive requires the ability to find water, food, and shelter.

Correct Versions: -Knowing how to build a fire is an essential skill for a person in a survival situation; also, staying alive requires the ability to find water, food, and shelter. -Knowing how to build a fire is an essential skill for a person in a survival situation. Also, staying alive requires the ability to find water, food, and shelter. Incorrect Versions: -Knowing how to build a fire is an essential skill for a person in a survival situation. While staying alive requires the ability to find water, food, and shelter. -Knowing how to build a fire is an essential skill for a person in a survival situation also, staying alive requires the ability to find water, food, and shelter

Natural sparkling water may also be called mineral water it contains various natural minerals.

Correct version: -Natural sparkling water may also be called mineral water; it contains various natural minerals. -Natural sparkling water may also be called mineral water because it contains various natural minerals. Incorrect version: -Natural sparkling water may also be called mineral water. Because it contains various minerals. -Natural sparkling water may also be called mineral water, it contains various minerals.

Also called the plague, the Black Death of 1347-51 traveled from Asia to the area around the Mediterranean [Sea, then, it] spread to the rest of Europe.

Sea. Then, it

Edit the following statement to correct any errors: Some cities try to build civic spirit and pride by exhibiting urban [art consequently large] outdoor murals are increasingly common.

art. Consequently, large

Advocates of hydraulic fracturing—a method used to extract natural gas from shale rock—emphasize its economic [benefits, opponents] emphasize this method's environmental risks.

benefits, while opponents

After years of relative silence on the subject, women began to talk openly about experiencing depression after giving [birth eventually the] stigma surrounding postpartum depression started to lessen.

birth. Eventually, the

Writers can respond to opposing arguments by conceding or [refuting, conceding] involves acknowledging that some or all of the opposing arguments are valid.

refuting. Conceding

In Utah, people with concealed-carry permits are allowed to bring their weapons onto high school [campuses in other words a teacher] with a permit may legally bring a gun to school.

campuses; in other words, a teacher

E-cigarettes are marketed as safer than regular [cigarettes however some] groups challenge this claim.

cigarettes; however, some

In opposition to the death penalty, some pharmaceutical companies have started to refuse to sell lethal injection [combinations meanwhile some] states have brought back the use of the firing squad and electrocution as methods of execution.

combinations; meanwhile, some

In terms of energy conservation, learning to use energy more efficiently is the key challenge for [consumers, developing] more sustainable forms of energy is the challenge for scientists and industry leaders.

consumers. Developing

Reports from 2015 described the social media giant Facebook as in [decline Facebook] still had more users than any other social media site.

decline; however, Facebook

Existing United States law prohibits compensation for organ [donation, however, some] people do not want to donate without being compensated.

donation. However, some

Young adults are often considered uninterested in civic [duty more] young people vote today than in past elections.

duty even though more

Edit the following statement to correct any errors: People who are deaf or hard of hearing can choose to have devices surgically implanted in their inner [ears, the] implants do not allow people to hear sounds naturally.

ears; however, the

An octopus has three [hearts each] of these hearts pumps blood to different parts of the octopus's body.

hearts; each

The cost of college tuition is at an all-time [high students] are beginning to question the worth of a college education.

high, and students

Social media allows students to communicate with their friends and family members [instantly, however, some critics say that using] apps such as Facebook and Snapchat while studying is likely to distract students from their work.

instantly. However, some critics say that using

Edit the following statement to correct any errors: Four-year and two-year colleges often respond to cuts in state funding by raising [tuition; one] however, one result is a greater financial burden on students and their families.

no error

The Black Death of 1347-51 caused parents and children to abandon each [other, even] priests refused to visit the sick to hear last confessions.

other, and even

To study the bacterium from the Black Death of 1347-51, scientists extracted material from the teeth of four victims of that [outbreak, these] victims, buried in a London cemetery at some point after 1348, were removed from their graves in the 1980s.

outbreak. These

The growth of independent news programs allows people to hear alternative [perspectives many] groups still choose mainstream media.

perspectives, but many

By 1400, Europe had seen at least six outbreaks of the Black Death, also called the [plague about] 25 million people, roughly a third of Europe's population at the time, had died from the Black Death.

plague; about

Deforestation causes many environmental [problems for example deforestation] drives climate change and speeds up global warming.

problems. For example, deforestation

Today, legislation controls organ-donation policies and [procedures indeed organ] and tissue donation is becoming one of the most regulated fields within health care.

procedures; indeed, organ

Revising is often the most challenging part of the writing [process, it] is also perhaps the most rewarding.

process, but it

Before modern cultivation, the majority of wild carrots were naturally [purple however few] people today have ever seen this original variety.

purple. However, few

A human disease from almost seven hundred years ago made headlines again [recently, in 2011, scientist] reported reconstructing the DNA of the bacterium responsible for the Black Death of 1347-51.

recently. In 2011, scientist

Edit the following statement to correct any errors: Downhill skiing attracts many people to the mountains each [year, however, skiers] must be aware of the potential for avalanches.

year. However, skiers

First patented in the mid-1700s, roller skates have been around for over two hundred [years however companies] still create new roller skate designs each year.

years; however, companies