Correct Modifiers and Concise Wording

Read the sentence. After sampling a few cake samples, the woman who is getting married picked the flavor of cake that she liked the best. Which answer choice is the best revision of the sentence to avoid repetition? After sampling a few cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor. After tasting cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor. After tasting the cakes, the woman getting married picked the best cake flavor. The sentence is correct as written.

***NOT*** After sampling a few cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor.

Read the sentence. The university has __________ students attending from other countries. Which word belongs in the blank? less lesser few fewer

***NOT*** less fewer

Which of the following sentences contains a misplaced modifier? Baking in the oven, Kaleb thought the cake smelled great. Learning geometry in school can be quite a challenge. Cynthia's class will visit the state museum on Tuesday. Today, our choir group learned the lyrics to a beautiful song.

Baking in the oven, Kaleb thought the cake smelled great.

Read the sentence. During the pizza party, Mrs. Saint-Claire served the children on paper plates. What is the best way to revise this sentence? Served on paper plates, Mrs. Saint-Claire during the party gave pizza to the children. Mrs. Saint-Claire, during the pizza party, served the children on paper plates. During the party, Mrs. Saint-Claire served pizza on paper plates to the children. The sentence is correct as written.

During the party, Mrs. Saint-Claire served pizza on paper plates to the children.

Which strategy is the best way to improve clarity in a wordy sentence? Use fewer powerful words. Avoid using adverbs. Eliminate redundancies. Use more modifiers.

Eliminate redundancies.

Read the sentence. My daily routine—the things I do every day—consists of studying, exercising, and working. What is the best way to rewrite the sentence to avoid repetition? My daily routine consists of studying, exercising, and working. My daily routine is the things I do every day like studying, exercising, and working. Studying, exercising, and working are the things I do every,day as part of my daily routine. I have an everyday routine that I do daily, which includes activities such as studying, exercising, and working.

My daily routine consists of studying, exercising, and working.

Read the sentence. When we returned to school after summer vacation, our teacher asked us to be prepared to share about our summer activities. Mark told us about his amazing visit to the Great Wall of China on Friday. What is the best way to revise the underlined sentence? Mark told us about his amazing visit on Friday to the Great Wall of China. On Friday, Mark told us about his amazing visit to the Great Wall of China. His amazing visit to the Great Wall of China on Friday, Mark told us about it. The sentence is correct as written.

On Friday, Mark told us about his amazing visit to the Great Wall of China.

Read the sentence. Floating in the pool, Sarah saw a bee trying to dry its wings. What is the best way to revise this sentence? Sarah saw a bee floating in the pool trying to dry its wings. Sarah saw a bee trying to dry its wings floating in the pool. Drying its wings in the pool, Sarah saw a floating bee. The sentence is correct as written.

Sarah saw a bee floating in the pool trying to dry its wings.

Read the sentence. Selena had an unexpected surprise when she attempted to duplicate a copy of a culinary dish she learned in culinary school. What is the best way to rewrite the sentence to avoid repetition? When she attempted to duplicate a copy of a culinary dish she learned in culinary school, Selena had an unexpected surprise. Selena had a surprise when she attempted to duplicate a dish she learned in culinary school. A surprise for Selena occurred when she attempted to copy a culinary dish she learned in culinary school. Selena's culinary dish gave her an unexpected surprise when she attempted to duplicate it.

Selena had a surprise when she attempted to duplicate a dish she learned in culinary school.

Read the sentence. The group of friends came to a consensus about which movie they would agree to see together. What is the best way to rewrite the sentence to avoid repetition? The group of friends came to a consensual agreement to see a movie together. Together the group of friends came to a consensus about which movie they would agree to see. The group of friends came to an agreement about the movie they would see together. Together they agreed as consenting friends about which movie to see.

The group of friends came to an agreement about the movie they would see together.

Unaware of the change in the week's work schedule, the loyal customers saw Marquis arrive to work a day early. What is the best revision for the sentence?

The loyal customers saw Marquis, who was unaware of the change in the week's work schedule, arrive to work a day early.

Read the sentence. The patient who was not feeling well told the doctor her head hurt and that she was experiencing blurry vision with her eyesight. Which answer choice is the best revision of the sentence to avoid repetition? Not feeling well, the patient told the doctor about her problems with her hurting head and blurry vision in her eyesight. The patient told the doctor about the symptoms affecting both her head and eyesight. The patient told the doctor about her blurry vision in her eyesight and her hurting headache problems. The doctor's patient told the doctor that her head hurt and her eyesight was blurry.

The patient told the doctor about the symptoms affecting both her head and eyesight.

Which of the following sentences should be revised to eliminate redundancy? The restaurant is famous for its delicious and tangy barbeque sauce. The troop will earn points for each and every box of cookies sold. Mr. Ellis decided to retire after an admirable and rewarding career in law. As a sailor, Michael traveled all over the world and saw amazing places.

The troop will earn points for each and every box of cookies sold.

Read the paragraph. Driving to the fair was a troublesome, difficult situation today. We planned on leaving at 5:30 p.m., which was unfortunately during rush hour. The traffic would be horrible and we did not want to be stuck. We decided to consult a map in an attempt to find an alternative route. Which sentence should be rewritten to improve the clarity of the paragraph? sentence 1 sentence 2 sentence 3 sentence 4

sentence 1

Which of the following is a redundant pair? fond memories positive result vast openness extended stay

vast openness

Read the sentence. Mrs. Nguyen explained to the class that they did __________ on their achievement exams. Which word belongs in the blank? good well best fairly

well