H is for Hawk

It was the wrong bird. This was the younger one. The smaller one. This was not my hawk.

Short sentences which help us to understand her thoughts and feelings of an emotional reaction, a crushing disappointment

As if someone had punched it, hard, from within

Simile which reflects the power of the bird. Also it already shows her emotions for this bird as she is aware of how amazing she is just from that box.

Oh.

Single word paragraph and sentence. Portrays suspense and silence, at the same time it illustrates her feelings of disappointment with that reaction

Im sure the other falconer would like the other bird? She is more beautiful than the first one, isn't she? I know this is out of order, but I ... could I?

Use of rethorical questions. This shows her desperate and crazy attempt to try and keep the first bird as she loves her so much more than the second one. On the other hand, a sense of confusion and doubt is created for the reader due to her incoherent expressions to try and keep the bird ' she is more beautiful than the first one'. This is non-sense for the reader as she is contradicting her self

This hawk had been hatched in an incubator, ... , and for the first few days of her life this man had fed her

A description of her feelings. It shows that she feels reflected into he first bird due to the thought of a falconer feeding her which is uncertain, but emphasises the father& children relationship she had before.

She came out like a Victorian Melodrama

A simile which creates an emotive and dramatic tone as it describes her reaction of panic horror and desperation towards the second bird.

Fizzing and fusing

Alliteration which express the confusion of the author. She is dubious about whether keeping the bird or not as the numbers are wrong however she is dazzled by her appearance

There was a moment of total silence

Ending sentences of the text. Suspense is used to convey the seriousness of this problem. She doesn't accept that the bird she has to keep is hers as it makes her feel horrified.

She is a conjuring trick. A reptile. A fallen angel. A griffon... A broken marionette.

Metaphors are used to make a sense of confusion and contrast of the birds physical appearance between something glorious such as a mythical creature a 'griffon' or a demon ' fallen angel'

Another hinge untied. Concentration. Infinite caution. Daylight irrigating the box.

Minor sentences which are not dramatically correct. Conveys her emotions of concern, worry and the fact that she is really nervous to meet her bird for the first time. In addition, tension is created as its a climatic structure of getting closer to seeing the bird.